Okay, so a while ago I had this dream. It was kind of creepy, but totally able to be a story. So I wrote it! Here it is.
Prologue
Cali sat slumped against the doorway, listening to the magic lesson being taught. The dust in the hallway wanted to make her sneeze, but she held her breath. Four year olds were not supposed to be listening to advanced magic classes, but it was simply too boring anywhere else.
“There are many different kinds of magical beings,” the magic mistress droned on. “Quite a few of them are nice and will grant wishes. Others simply wish humans would leave them alone. But there are some, which are incredibly evil. These you must not disturb at all costs. The results can be fatal.” Cali straightened up. This sounded interesting.
“There was a certain girl enrolled in this boarding school,” the mistress’s voice was almost a whisper. “She was a very good Wizardess. But rather too curious for her own good. One day she ventured to the Haunted Cave, which is very much off limits. She never returned.” There were several gasps from the classroom. “But,” the mistress continued, “When we discovered she was gone and tried to go in the cave to see if she was there, we could not go in. Someone had put a magical barrier in the mouth of the cave, preventing anyone to enter. We could have breached the seal, but we decided if someone had gone to all that trouble there must have been a reason. Things unknown are things better left undisturbed.”
Chapter One
Cali stood pondering, tapping her foot. Ever since that day she had overheard the story about the Haunted Cave, she had wondered. What was really in this cave? What could possibly be so bad no one could know about it? And now her chance had come. She had woken up early and climbed out the window, sneaking here before anyone could catch her. But now, should she really open it? Cali was confident she could, secretly studying magic from the age of four had paid off. But there was something sinister about the cave, the mouth deep in shadow and the surrounding cliff completely bare of life. And the birds should have been singing by now.
“Oh posh,” Cali shook off her fears and advanced bravely towards the cave. She shivered a little as she walked under the shadow, and then came to a stop. She could see only blackness, but she could feel a wall in front of her. Its cold smooth stones seemed impossible to climb, assembled with magic instead of normal means. Closing her eyes, Cali lightly touched the wall in front of her. Sketching a doorway with her fingers, she uttered a few words and pushed with all her magical strength. Finally the door creaked inwards, and Cali stumbled through.
“Oh,” Cali breathed with wonder as she stared at the sight before her. A dome ceiling arched high above, chandeliers fixed in a spiraling pattern. They shed light to every part of the great hall, which extended far back in the cave. There were little niche’s carved out in the walls, each one holding the head of a statue. But these statues were unlike any Cali had seen before, the twisted faces and grotesque features depicted horrible monsters. Shivering a little now, Cali took a step back. She could feel some force here, some evil presence that made her wish she had never opened the wall. It seemed to draw her forward, pulling, urging her to continue on. What had she disturbed?
The chatter of girl’s voices shook Cali free from whatever trance she was in. Turning to look, she gasped with horror as her classmates spilled into the hall. They laughed excitedly, led by Hilda, one of the popular girls. “What are you doing here?” Cali asked confusedly, stepping towards them.
“We followed you,” Ferna giggled. “Hilda noticed you were gone and convinced us to come. My, I never thought you would come here! You must have heard the tale about the girl--”
“Yes I have,” Cali cut her off abruptly. “And I wish I hadn’t opened this place up! There’s something dangerous here, I’m telling you. We have to go back.”
“Go back?” Hilda’s voice rang forth scornfully. “After going to all the trouble, you want to turn back? Nonsense.” She beckoned to the other girls. “We must go on.”
“No! Please don’t,” Cali begged.
“I don’t know,” Another girl named Silva said doubtfully. “Cali’s the most advanced in magic, of all of us. And this feels like a very magical place. If she says we should go back, we should.”
“The most advanced?” Hilda’s eyes flamed. “She is most certainly not.” Cali grimaced. Hilda was a senior in the Boarding School, and it was well known that she was very touchy. “I will not go back,” Hilda repeated firmly again. “And if all you lily-livered cowards want to stay here, that’s fine. I’m going on. What could be here anyways?” She stalked forward, stubbornness apparent in every step.
Resignedly the girls grouped around Cali. They knew there was no convincing Hilda now. She walked the length of the hall, and at the end stopped a moment. Then she went on, through a door Cali hadn’t even noticed. The door, now that she saw it, looked like a black gaping hole. There was deathly silence as the time stretched on. Finally Hilda came back out, and all the girls sighed with relief. But as she came closer, something seemed to be wrong. She walked funny, stiffly, like a machine. Her face was completely blank and white. Her eyes which were flashing with anger before, now seemed lifeless and dead.
Cali drew in a sharp breath as the spirit-less Hilda stopped in front of them. “Go,” she said in a ominous tone before she fell face down onto the cave floor. Screaming, the girls fled.
I could never be a horror writer. I get too creeped out while I'm writing it! But the funny thing was, when I told the dream to Anna and Erin, they said it sounds alot like a book they read. And I havent even read the book! But there the story is. I hope I'll continue writing it.
Kelia
Thursday, April 26, 2007
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19 comments:
Keila! THAT WAS WONDERFUL!!!!! I Love it!!!! Now you have me hyper and all up for writing lol-which is good by all means! I used to be a big mystery writer but the whole fantasy world sucked me in so now I just watch mysterious and write them very little though I do have a pretty good mystery started that I did for school when I was like 8 or 9(gosh that seems like years ago and it wasn't!)
How do you write so good so you can get me sucked into it AND get me into yet another insane writing mood-lol-I LOVE YOU! ROFL
Uh if Anna reads this I'm gonna send you an info on how I do the whole thing with video making-easier than posting it here. :)
uuuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhhhhh
hmmmmmmm do I have anything else to say? Not really but I'll say this again: AWESEOM KEILA!
she-who-is-writing-a-sappy-Harry-Potter-Fan-Fiction
Kelia I totally agree with Katie! It's really really good, and you should definately keep writing it! My only suggestion would be that we might want to get to meet Cali and learn a little more about her before it jumps into this whole thing... but that's only if you're going to turn it into a full length story... so yeah, awesome!
And Katie, that sounds great! Thanks! :D
She-who-needs-to-get-her-butt-writing- NOW!!!
She-who-just-finished-el-MUSICAL!!!
YEAH, BABY!
Kelia, that's AMAZINNNGGG. I know I say that all the time, but I ALWAYS mean it! Everyone writes so WELL!
:D
I'm so tired --- Longer comment tomorrow in Yearbook, if I'm not sleeping.
♥ forever,
Lauren [Cindy Lou]
Aw, thanks guys so much. I want to keep writing it, but I'm not exactly sure what to do next. All of that except my prologue was basically just my dream, so I dont have a planned plot yet. I might add a little more in the beggining of the first chapter about how she grew up in the boarding school. I dont really know. But thanks for the encouragingness everyone!
Kelia
Isn't that weird, how you don't really ever know if you're going to keep working on a story [unless you're NaNoing and screaming about how you'd like to, but can't]? I hate thinking, "Wow, this is cool." and then running into an idea that I think is better, because then I'll give the first one up to so the second, which leads to a third, ect, ect.
ANYWAYS.
NOW I WANT TO WRITE A BILLION PAGES OF SOMETHING.
...Where'd my USB go? :D
♥
L.
Man I know what you mean....
It is seriously dangerous to bring me to a movie theater cause I see a good movie and get this great idea for a Fan fiction and I shove EVERYTHING else aside and fixate on that.(I even did that with the movie the polar express. and i quote myself "I need a life")
hmmmmmm I'm waffling I started this interest Harry Potter Fan Fiction but it's kind of.....sappy and romantic....not totally bad rofl(I prefer my Harry to the ones in the book-no offense if there are any Harry lovers here. I just find the book Harry can be jerkish at times-not always.) and then there's my LOTR fan fiction which I love.....I'm not sure which one to post!*pouts like a four year old* if any of you have suggestions-please interject-i'd love you for doing so..... :)
Gah my eyebrow is twitching!
ROFL, great story Keila(again!) ! :)
She-who-has-a-twitchy-eyebrow-TWITCH-!
I do that ALL the time, the starting a story and then getting an idea for a better one. Its the writers curse! The only story I've finished this year and last is my nano. Isnt that sad?
Kelia
Lol, not really.
The only thing I've ever finished is a 10 page horror story [the one I posted on here that I wrote in seventh grade] and the Avalon story.
Together, that's like ten thousand words.
xP
♥ L.
Whats the Avalon story?
Kelia
The drug-busting girl who was named after a dead city. :D
...And knew karate.
I think it's a whole lot of posts back. If I find it, I'll link it. :D
Lol, I have to warn you, though, it's stupid.
Wait a sec... I don't even know if I posted it. I can't find it.
If anyone else has a smidgen-y clue what I'm talking about, I'd love to know that I'm only partially insane. :P
Argh!
L.
I thought you posted that it sounds familiar....though you know, I'm not totally sane sooooo, we could be on the same boat....
I'm still trying to decided which fan fiction to post*scratches chin* that's why I haven't.
Did you check every post Lauren???? I swear that sounds SO familiar.
Katie-Baity(little hyper I just read some HP Fan Fictions*giggles*)
I dont remember you posting it Lauren, I just remember you posting the other old story and various half finished works.
Katie, you should post the HP fan fiction. Dont know why I think so!
Kelia
Lol. I'll check around again.
I agree, Katie, but then again, I wrote it. :P
Haha, yeah Keila, I'm going to look around. If I haven't, oh well, I'll do it much late after I've been through and killed it over several times, but it will be up. Eventually. If it hasn't already.
I dont know what to do next in my story AT ALL. I could do a bit more of her running away and being scared, but I really have to get a PLOT. Now.
Do post your Avalon story, Lauren. It sounds cool. Have fun killing it. :D
Kelia
Sorry I haven't been around much guys... I'm sick, and when I'm sick I tend to be on the net plenty, but just feel too dead to comment. Or something like that. :D
I don't think you posted the Avalon story L... although I think you've already come to that conclusion! Lol. But anyways, yeah, post it!
..................... I'm so dead right now. More later, I guess. ;)
Anna
GET BETTER SOON!
:D
Ahw, THANK YOU LAUREN!!!(For the card and everything. I'm already feeling better! :D)
I love you. Seriously.
Hope today isn't another blah day for you!
Love,love,love,
Miss Annapants
Bwahaha.
:D
Anytime!
Anyone else need a card?!
♥♥♥
L
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