The end of my nano and a challenge!

Hi everyone!!!! So I'm posting the end of my nano. Probably none of you will get anything thats happening, but I just want to know, is the end silly? I cant decide.

The next day I was awoken by pattering feet, people were running through the building. "They're back!" Cardill shouted through the door, I jumped up and ran to the cafeteria with the rest of them. Kip and Enlil were already there, looking grim in the early morning light.
"Its all true," Enlil said soberly as the room filled up. "Everything Ember assumed is true." my breath caught in my chest, that was what I had been fearing to hear and now that I did it sounded worse than ever.
"We followed the car like she said, when they left for the night," Kip jumped in, not looking excited about the adventure they'd had like I thought he would. "They went to this tall building and there were all these security guards. We barely slipped in but we made it, they met in a big conference room with a long table."
"We looked through a window," Enlil added. "We couldn't get in there, there were so many security guards."
"They handed a report to a official looking guy, who was all bald." I took a sharp breath, they had made an alliance with the government. "he read it," Kip continued, "And he smiled. Then he said something that I couldn't hear but Enlil lip read it."
"He said 'Thank you,'" Enlil said. "Then, 'so the plan is set. We have everything we need. The troops will go through the gate tomorrow at midnight.'"
There were gasps from people all over the room, I was one of them. "Tonight?" Ylaii exclaimed, paling. "They're coming tonight?"
"How come it took you so long to get back?" Taran asked. "Did they see you?"
"Well, yes," Kip looked ashamed. "There were so many security guards, and no one going out, we had to make a run for it. Then we led them all over the city, the part fairy who was with us knew all the back streets so we lost them after a while. Then we came straight here."
"That's all right," I said. "We got the information we needed. And now, what are we going to do?"
"I think there's only one thing to do," Gerido held up a hand, calming the room which had almost burst out into hysterics. "We must seal the gate."
"Are you sure?" I quavered, but I knew that was the only way. Ylaii and Gerido nodded silently at me and I spoke again "Then we have to get Grandfather and Kimael and the rest out of there."
"They're already coming," Enlil said. "The other part fairy with us knew what we would decide, he was going to gather everyone there and get them over here."
"How long will that have taken them?" Gerido asked. "We have to seal it as soon as possible."
"An hour, he said," Kip supplied. "It's been half of that time."
"Lets go to the gate then," Gerido said. "We'll meet them there and seal it when they're all here." I nodded and we set off, quite a troop of grim people. There must have been a hundred of us going to seal the gate.
We waited silently there, I whispered to Gerido "Do you have everything you need for the sealing?"
"Yes its only a spell," he whispered back. "I'm ready."
And then Grandfather appeared, I rushed towards him but he put his hand up. "Don't, Ember," he whispered, a tight smile on his face.
"Grandfather?" I said, confused. I had never seen him like this.
"Go, while you can," he whispered. "Before they come."
"What do you mean?" I was beginning to get very worried.
"Go!" he was agitated, urging us on. "Go!"
"Maybe we should," Ylaii said slowly. "He knows something we don't." and so we started walking, up the air and over the trees. I had no idea what was happening, but as I watched grandfather watch us sadly I knew something terrible was going to happen. And when the next person arrived, it did.
Kimael arrived struggling, an arm was over her throat so she couldn't move much. And who was the arm attached to? None other than Retinus himself.
"What are you doing?" I stopped walking and ran a few steps forward, anger building up in my chest. "Let her go!"
"Stop walking, all of you," Retinus said calmly and took out a gun. "Or she dies." we all froze, waiting for something to happen, waiting for someone to come. "Oh, I'd better move," Retinus stepped off the gate as the next person arrived, and then the next, and then the next, and then the next. I stared in horror as man after man arrived in the peaceful clearing, each holding a gun with the symbol of my country on it. An army was coming through the gate.
I glanced worriedly at Ylaii, what could we do? If we moved they would kill Kimael, if we didn't they would shoot us where we stood. I saw her lips moving silently and suddenly there was a clap of what sounded like thunder, there was a wall in front of us. It was white, made of thick glass, I could see Retinus's face through it but it was distorted.
"Its magic," Ylaii breathed. "They wont be able to get through it. I also put a shield on Kimael and your grandfather."
"So what do we do now?" I peered through the glass, the army was getting too big for the clearing and they were hacking through the beautiful trees to try to find room.
"We run," she told me. "As far away as we can." And so all of us turned and ran, the wall following us a few feet behind. I could hear Retinus's angry shout and they ran below us, not catching up but the wall tilted so they couldn't shoot us. We sped over the countryside, rolling hills and tall trees going by below. At last Retinus and his men gave up and they stopped running, we continued for a little farther but then stopped.
"So are grandfather and Kimael really safe?" I asked, panting a little bit for breath.
"Safe from guns and anyone wanting to kill them," Ylaii answered. "But we will have to rescue them as soon as possible. They most likely won't bother to feed them."
"How are we going to get food?" I approached that problem.
"We'll think about that later," Ylaii smiled thinly and said a few words, all of a sudden I saw a miniature glass wall in front of her. "They cant really stop us from taking them," she said. "Since they cant kill us. I'll go now."
"Shouldn't someone else go with you?" I was worried for her safety, even though I trusted the shield.
"I'll be fine," Ylaii said "I might wait for dark though. That way they wont even know I was there."
"Good idea." We lapsed into silence, I took a deep breath. I wondered how long we would be running, if Ylaii or Gerido had a plan to face them. But looking at everyone's tired faces I didn't exactly think they did.
Night came at last and Ylaii smiled at me and slipped away. I watched her go until the darkness swallowed up her body, then sighed. I couldn't do anything about it now. There was a motion besides me and I looked up to see Taran, his eyes following where I had been looking.
"She went to try to get grandfather and Kimael back," I explained. "She has her own shield but I'm still worried."
"Ember, I've wanted to say something for the past weeks," Taran said after a moment of silence. "But I never could make myself do it. Now, I may not have another chance."
I looked up at his face, the moon was shining on it. "What?" I asked. Taran opened his mouth-- sighed and looked away. He lifted his hands as if to explain something, but then he took a deep breath and bent down and I felt myself being kissed for the very first time.
"Ember!" Ylaii came running up, Taran took a step away but I was blushing furiously. "Ooooooh," she stopped short and winked at me and then continued excitedly "I was right! They couldn't do anything against me with the shield."
"Did any of them see you?" I asked, trying to regain my composure but my brain was whirring triple time. Did Taran really think of me like that?
"There was someone on guard but he couldn't shoot me," Ylaii said. "I just took Kimael and your grandfather and away we went!"
"Where are they?" I didn't see them.
"They're telling Gerido what happened," Ylaii said. "Come on, lets go listen. Unless, of course, you want to stay here…" I clapped my hand over Ylaii's mouth before she could tease me any more and marched her over to where I now saw grandfather and Kimael.
"The part fairy who went with you had just told us everything that happened and had gone off to get the others," grandfather was saying "When Retinus and his army showed up at the square. They threatened Kimael and told me to tell them if it actually was the gate, I said it was and they made me go ahead of them. Then you know everything that happened."
"What are we going to do now?" Kimael asked.
"I think we have to just keep running," Gerido said gravely. "We cant face up to them, we only have a hundred people they have at least double that."
"More," Kimael said. "They kept coming through the gate when you ran off, at least five hundred now."
"But we all have powers and they don't," I said, it may have sounded like I wanted to fight but I really didn't. But running wasn't going to accomplish anything. "And they cant attack us through the wall. Surely we have a chance."
"We do have a chance," Gerido said. "But do we want to risk it?"
"Where will we get food?" Ylaii asked tiredly.
"We can buy some." Gerido said. There was silence and no one knew what to say, finally I said something that had been bouncing around in my brain for a while now.
"Human World is very dangerous," I said quietly. "Combined with Third World, they could overtake Fairy World if they did it the right way. Shouldn't we try to shove them out of here now, when there's only five hundred to oppose us? If we run for a day, a week, a month, there may very well be thousands to fight. We couldn't do that by ourselves so we would have to tell all of Fairy World, that would take longer and then there would be more to fight. It would keep building up and up and up."
There was more silence and finally grandfather spoke. "As much as I don't like it, Ember is right. I don't want to see anyone die as much as you don't, but running is only going to make more die." Gerido sighed heavily and nodded.
"Then we fight," he said, it looked like it was hard for him to say it. "We fight while there is only five hundred, and if we do not succeed against those someone will go and tell all of Fairy World. For now I don't want to get them involved in this."
"Who will lead?" Ylaii asked.
"Enlil should," Taran spoke for the first time. "He can call down thunder and lightening and floods on their army."
"All right," Gerido said. "Enlil leads. We fight in the morning." We spent the remainder of that night telling everyone, at last I sank onto the air and put my head in my hands. I had argued to fight, but would it really be the wisest thing? People might die.
Taran sat next to me, I wanted to talk but I felt shy all of a sudden. I just smiled a bit at him and he whispered "It'll be all right." but he had said that before, when we hadn't known if anything was true, and it hadn't been all right. How all right would it be this time?
At last the sun rose, it was an amazing experience to see it from the air. I almost forgot everything that had happened and would happen as I stared down at the fiery ball making its way up into the sky, and the chill that had been with me all night disappeared.
We formed our army in an arrow shape, Enlil at the front. Taran and I stood next to each other somewhere in the middle of the slant, and at Enlils word we started marching forward. We got to Retinus's camp and I gasped, there were easily a thousand men there. They must have been coming all night!
"How are we going to do this?" I moaned to Taran. "There's so many of them! Ten for ever one of us!" Taran looked a bit stricken too as he looked down on them. Retinus saw us standing up there and waved cheerfully.
"Get in battle formation!" he told the men behind him and they formed a square, taking up the whole section of rolling hills they had camped on. I gulped nervously. What was I going to do in the battle anyways? I didn't know any spells by heart and my power was transportation. What could I do with that?
"Lets fight!" Retinus roared out when everyone was ready and the turmoil began. All the soldiers immediately tried to shoot us but their bullets bounced off the wall and came back to them. There was the sound of thunder in the sky and rain started pouring, gathering up in the bottoms of the hills and threatening to sweep part of the army away. Gerido was using his power to fling boulders through the air and Cardill froze ten soldiers at once with her stare, I began to feel hopeful. Would this work after all? But then there were the snipers. About fifty men had crept around the wall, it had to stay where it was to shield us from all the bullets so we were wide open when they got to the back of it. Someone cried out and Taran rushed away to heal them, Ylaii put up another wall and another but she was getting tired.
I covered my ears with my hands, the sound was getting to me. What could I do to help? I could feel anger building up, I couldn't do anything! People were dying and I was just standing here! Finally I strode to the wall and shouted through, looking down on a blurry Retinus,
"Why do you destroy?" I shouted through the wall. "Why do you only seek to destroy? Why do you not wish for light?"
"There is no light!" he shouted back, for some reason I could hear his voice through all the noise. "There is only darkness! How can there be light when people suffer so? Why did my parents and everyone I know die when I was a boy? Why was my country overturned? If I'm at the top of the darkness at least I cannot be hurt!"
"If there is no darkness," I challenged him, ignoring the mayhem around me, "Why are there flowers? Why is there the sun?"
"That is only the dark in disguise," he said. "Trying to fool you to thinking the darkness is gone, but it always comes in the form of night."
"Then why is there the moon? Why do stars continually pierce the darkness?" I shouted back. "There may be darkness, but you cannot deny the existence of light!" And that was when I saw it. I may have been crazy to be thinking all these philosophical thoughts in the midst of a war, but it felt right. Yes, there was darkness, the evilness of third world and human world, but there was also Fairy World. Fairy World was like a light in that, say the moon in the night. And us, everyone around me, were the stars. And what had part fairies been doing for the last thousand centuries? They had been protecting the gates. Making sure only few passed through them. But if the gates were mostly closed, how could the light get out? I straightened up, I knew what I had to do. Retinus was still shouting, unintelligible words that didn't make any sense and the noise of the battle was overwhelming. I whispered through the noise, and somehow my whisper carried over all the shouts.
"Gates," I said "be open." And suddenly there was light, a blinding light that pierced through my eyelids. It came from the clearing far away, I squinted and I could see that the gate had disappeared and now there was only a hole of pure light. There was another hole of light in the main building near the clearing, what looked to be the direction of my room. The gates were open. And all around me there was the sound of doors creaking open, a tree was suddenly emblazoned in light, a big rock was shining brightly. Other worlds were opening up.
The battle had suddenly stopped, all the part fairies were looking at me. Retinus and his men were crouching on the ground, shielding their eyes from the light. They had never seen anything like it. But I had, and I knew the goodness of fairy world was spreading through all the worlds in the universe and changing them for good.
Finally the light dimmed, still there around the gates but leaving us room to open our eyes. Retinus glared at me.
"What have you done?" he shouted, but his voice cracked. "What is all this-- light?"
"The gates are open," I called down to him. "and the light is free to go to all the worlds. Go back to third world, if you wish, go back and cower in a corner. You'll probably even try to take over your world again. But be warned, it will not be the same." And the wall in front of me crumbled away and I saw them clearly, Retinus and his men were creatures who had lived in darkness and come to be like darkness. But maybe they would be changed in the sudden light. Retinus stood up an glowered, he stalked through the countryside until he reached the gate. His whole army went through the gate then, disappearing one by one. Fairy World was back to the way it had been before, but it would never be the same.
I turned around to look at everyone behind me, they were staring at me with awe on their faces. "How did you know?" Ylaii asked quietly. "How did you know to open the gates? Our only thoughts, before, had been to close them." I shrugged, the feeling of soaring on clouds was leaving me and I was wondering that too. How had I known?
"Its because you're you," Taran spoke from the crowd and smiled at me. "You're you." I smiled back at him, a secret little smile and my heart was full of gladness.
The rest of that day everyone celebrated, cheering me on and not quite understanding everything that had just happened. I didn't understand it either. But I think it had to do something with the sparkles in the air, that feeling of good will that was always there in Fairy World. Could it be that one world, by mistake or just by the people who lived there, had gathered up all the goodness? Well not all of it, because there were places in Human world that were like this. But now that the gates were open and the goodness was free to spread I had the feeling that there would be a lot more.
That night I stood on the ground for the first time that day, I still liked that feeling of security. The night was dark except for a glimmer from a tree and a boulder, two new worlds that I would have to explore someday. I looked up at the stars they shone as bright as ever. My eyes widened as I followed a thick line of stars, they were straight for a while but then curved around. It almost looked like a doorway. The stars in that constellation shone brighter than others, it practically seemed like the light was from another place. I slowly smiled as I stared up at them. There was a movement besides me and Taran was there, he looked up at the stars with me. I watched his face as he noticed the gate, I saw his eyes widen and sparkle.
"I have a feeling," I said, all my insides feeling furry with happiness "That from now on there is going to be an adventure around every corner."
The stars glimmered and agreed.
The End

So with that said, we havent done a challenge for december yet! I know its a really busy month and all, but we still should do one. So here it is, we each have to write a query letter. I have nooooo idea how to write one of those, so it'll be good practice. And we just have to post it on here, not send it anywhere. That would be scary.
Everyone keep writing! And Merry Christmas!
Kelia